This is one of the best train stories I've ever read. It captures all the energy and innocence of discovering a new world, but seen through the eyes of someone who has the technical knowledge and language to convincingly describe that world. Your simple, direct style is perfectly matched to the subject matter, you don't make the mistake of trying to glorify it, it's beautiful as is.
I felt like the Tony section followed well, no reason to drop it. It shows your life drifting increasingly in this new direction and your evolution as a rider.
The only immediate criticism i have is that the hearing lacked context. Everything else is so meticulously detailed, this seems rushed by comparison. Plus, you've already laid out how the duty list works, with your name creeping up towards the top, and the rigidity/demanding nature of the job. The structure is already there for us to understand how you could fuck up, or say fuck it, or get fucked over as the case may have been: just tell us what happened in a line or three.
Thanks for bumping.
This is such a fantastic and useful response, thank you. I never even gave a second thought to the hearing portion. I wonder why I wrote it like that. My best guess is because it's not necessarily something that I enjoyed, whereas the rest of he story was good times. I thought I did leave cliff notes on what happened, I'll have to go back and work on it. Maybe try to paint the scene better. Again, thank you so much!
Just for clarification, you did end up going to Chicago first then down to NOLA? Did you take the CN/IC Route? Anything worth mentioning about the way down? This could almost be a story of it's own.
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